October
25
100wc T4W2
There was the answer, so close, but so far away… beginning to reach out, further… further, just missing. So much depended on this… something began to swim upward… waves of colour… black, grey, turning into the whole rainbow… pulling her up, up, dragging her back to where she was meant to be. Refusal, pulling back. Not wanting to go back, just wanting to stay with the answer… the key to her success… the answer swimming closer, obstructed by waves of colour, wanting to pull her back… back up into herself… eyes snapped open. “But where did it go?” she shouted.
Sophie, this is a very powerful piece of writing. Grammatically, I don’t know that you should have used so many ellipses, but as your reader, they totally drew me into your enigma.
Of course, I am also left wondering what the question might have been!
I do hope I am fortunate enough to share more of your work in the future.
Jackie (Team 100WC)
New Zealand